Wednesday, May 1, 2013


19 comments:

  1. Sounds like a poignant story with a great cast of characters.

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  2. Fabulous opening hook. Wow. And that is a SOLID first 250 words.

    This sounds like a book that would successfully make me cry!

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  3. Oh my goodness, this sounds so sweet and potentially so heartbreaking. Great job! Good luck!

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  4. I'm definitely intrigued. What do the black butterflies mean and where did her dad go?
    Obviously, I'm hoping for a happy ending for Bee.

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  5. Love the characters and the setting and especially the (!).
    ~Jill Haugh

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  6. Your first paragraph is absolutely PERFECT! Good luck!

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  7. Wow - so intrigued by this! You've got me rooting for Bee already ~ :) Best of luck to you!

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  8. Great query! Great hook, great characters, great premise. And especially great first 250. (That was 5 greats I just said :)

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  9. Breathtaking! The first sentence of the query is amazing and the last sentence of the 250 sets the hook in deep. I would love to read this novel. Best of luck!:)

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  10. Love your quirky characters! Magical writing!

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  11. Really love that she ends up living on the fringes and finds friends and some kind of richness there. Also very intrigued by the black butterflies. WOuld love to read more. Good luck!!

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  12. You got me with the first sentence of the query. The rest only made me want to read it more.
    Good luck!

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  13. Ohhhh yes. I hope the story contains the grit that the query promises. If so, send an autographed copy my way. ;)

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  14. The first sentence of your query is a REAL nabber. Very well done. Your 250 are also solid. I think you'll do really well!

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  15. Both of your first lines are totally great! I'm super curious about "the people who are left behind" as mentioned in the query. This sounds amazing. Good luck! Corinne

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  16. Oh, I love this. Best of luck to you!

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  17. Great query and love the intro! Good luck!

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  18. Hey Amy,

    My interest is piqued! (Brenda gave me the green light to ask for pages). Would you send me a pitch letter with a one page synopsis and the 1st 50 pages to pooja@kimberleycameron.com? Looking forward to it.

    Pooja Menon
    Kimberley Cameron & Associates

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  19. I was revisiting Cupid's blog & saw you'd made Honorable Mention, so congrats on that!

    I do still really like your story. Good luck with it.

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